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What if leaves watch as people fall,
Or paintings stare at them from the wall
While music,silently,listens to us all
In the night,when the moon admires this world
And the wind trembles because of the cold
That rests in a human's mind, a darkness untold.
Maybe books read us page after page
At times when we lock ourselves in a cage
Enjoying the stoyline until it causes damage
Nightmares are the ones frightened by humans
And the clouds just cry on our shoulders
Liberating, throwing their liquid treasures.
How about summer's impatience to meet you?
Or a movie composing its actors and a review
About a sculpture perfecting its artist
And a canvas coloring its painter with mist
What if I sit back, and let the sheet continue it
While the reader struggles to write until infinite.
I have chosen that category almost aleatory[as in almost all my poems] because there is no "philosophy" category.
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moonahmed Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist
beautiful.

and yes there should be a category of "philosophy"
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013   General Artist
Thank you!
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1blackheart Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
OMG i just love this! this is so abstract!! it makes me feel so egoistic!! like really, we think the whole world revolves around us????
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   General Artist
I am glad you liked it :)
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Si-gyn Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is just.. brilliant! I love this poem! <3
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   General Artist
Thank you for sharing your opinion! :)
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mariswood Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Loved it, the point of view is so interesting and the words perfect. Congrats :clap:
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PseudonymLizzieDeLov Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Cloned comment... why bother to make such an OVER THE TOP statement on every poem you fav? You insult the writer with your inferior throwaway comments. For shame!
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
I wasn't getting at your work, and I never critised it.
I was simply asking how you got so much publicity, because I was genuinely curious. I even made a point to state I wasn't being sarcastic.
My dig was at the person (AceOfSongs)who felt the need to kiss your arse whilst making a jackass throw-away remark about every other artist on here.

On another note, I was writing casually, so yeah, I would use relaxed slang. There is a difference between writing casually and professionally, so right back at 'ya', sodding toff. And by the way, I thought 'English native language' was in EXTREMELY bad taste as I'm Irish. Prejudice cow. Do you wear sheets and carry burning crosses too? How can anyone support you after making such a horrible remark?

Since you 'sincerely respect' my relaxed writing skills when giving an opinion, let me give you another that has to do with your poem.
The grammer and punctuation... it needs serious work! Also, some lines could do with cutting out altogether. In this case, it should be professional.
I can't lie and say it's a bad poem. As much as it pains me now to say, because you're a prejudice bitch, I quite like it. It has bags of potential. But it needs a little editing.
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HetaliasHero Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Student General Artist
I love how the perspective is changed around; it makes you reflect on the things we usually think. It's a very beautiful piece :)
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012   General Artist
I am glad you think that :)
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HetaliasHero Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
I'm glad you're glad I thought that :) aha
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ashalynd Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
Beautiful.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
How did your work become so popular? I'm not being sarcastic- just curious.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012   General Artist
It just became :) As I am anonymous, I do not have any friend on devart and I do nothing for publicity. I don't give a damn about favs, comments etc. and I also do not give a damn about what people think. Pure and simple as it sounds.
Also, if you would like, you may write a short commentary, or bring more arguments to this[from a negative point of view,of course] highlighting exactly what you think it is such a "crap". After that, my friend, all my respect!
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AceOfSongs Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
It's been a long time since I admired a poem for its content - it seems like most of the time they're either pretty but without any deep meaning, or they're pretentious/trying waaay too hard. This was gorgeous!

(Although my OCD forces me to add that I think you meant "impatience" not "unpatience.")

I love it!
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
Quite an ugly thing to state. I've come across a few hidden gems on here that puts others to shame but I'd never critise them for lacking skill! People confuse pretentious and effort (trying waaay too hard) with intelligence and passion. Have ya ever considered that instead of them lacking deep meaning, that maybe you simply lack the skill to understand? The thing wit poetry is tht writing it and reading it are two separate things.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for sharing your opinion! [I also sincerely respect you for writing like "ya", "tht" , "wit"(english may also be your native language) and you still have the courage to judge and accuse for lacking skill]. I totally agree with you!
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
I wasn't getting at your work, and I never critised it.
I was simply asking how you got so much publicity, because I was genuinely curious. I even made a point to state I wasn't being sarcastic.
My dig was at the person (AceOfSongs)who felt the need to kiss your arse whilst making a jackass throw-away remark about every other artist on here.

On another note, I was writing casually, so yeah, I would use relaxed slang. There is a difference between writing casually and professionally, so right back at 'ya', sodding toff. And by the way, I thought 'English native language' was in EXTREMELY bad taste as I'm Irish. Prejudice cow. Do you wear sheets and carry burning crosses too? How can anyone support you after making such a horrible remark?

Since you 'sincerely respect' my relaxed writing skills when giving an opinion, let me give you another that has to do with your poem.
The grammer and punctuation... it needs serious work! Also, some lines could do with cutting out altogether. In this case, it should be professional.
I can't lie and say it's a bad poem. As much as it pains me now to say, because you're a prejudice bitch, I quite like it. It has bags of potential. But it needs a little editing.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012   General Artist
I am sorry, I didn't know your nationality, so I said "may be" and I never wanted to make any remarks or to criticise anybody, because it is not my problem.

I agree, it needs editing and corrections, I am not very proud of this work and I never thought it will ever become by any chance popular. Also, being popular is not my intention and it doesn't suit me.
Thanks for responding! :)
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
I can't believe I wrote that!Thank you very much for sharing your opinion and correcting that mistake.
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SupernaturalChic16 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG! This poem was just soo amazing. It's by far one of my favourites! I luv the way u look at things, like with the books reading us and the canvas colouring it painter, etc. This just really spoke to me and blew me away. I'm like at a loss for words. lol. I just luv this so much!!!! I didn't think I could like a poem as much as i like urs.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
You are so kind:) Thank you very much!
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SupernaturalChic16 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ur very welcome! i luved it just that much! like i really did!!! it like is now a fav. of mine. next to edgar allen poe's work. lol
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   General Artist
:)
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SupernaturalChic16 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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GirlyRainbowVampire Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sooooo amazing... :happycry: I love it :heart:
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for sharing your opinion!
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GirlyRainbowVampire Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome :meow:
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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djoru Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Student General Artist
WOW! its very beautiful
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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djoru Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Student General Artist
no problemo~ c:
no seriously i really liked it
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Well, I am glad to hear that :)
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zackrock Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
Very interesting trail of thought - Adding it to my favorite collection, well done sir :)
Though the ending puzzles me.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Thank you very much, sir! :)
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Skylark-13 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Student Writer
Ahaha, a very interesting poem, but the cover image... That is not a proper enough way to give credit. It should be like this:

The cover art is not mine, done by [artist], original work is here: [link], I was given permission to use it.

Because yes, you do need permission to use it, in case you didn't think you did. Thank you~

P.S. I don't know specifically about poems, but there is a philosophy literature category!
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
I don't find it...and about the image, forget about it...I am canceling it anyway, so that people will stop complaining and "worrying" about me ;)

Thank you for sharing your opinion and for the advice!
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Skylark-13 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Student Writer
Ahaha... Alright... And you're welcome. ^^
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Beauty Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
hope u got permission to use that image.
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Forget about the image, I am canceling it so people will stop "worrying" about me ;)
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
So...will you please explain what does that mean?
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Uhm...okay?
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
Wonderful poem! :iconreadingplz:
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012   General Artist
Thank you very much!
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roneta8 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
Love it !!!!!!
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