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What if leaves watch as people fall,
Or paintings stare at them from the wall
While music,silently,listens to us all
In the night,when the moon admires this world
And the wind trembles because of the cold
That rests in a human's mind, a darkness untold.
Maybe books read us page after page
At times when we lock ourselves in a cage
Enjoying the stoyline until it causes damage
Nightmares are the ones frightened by humans
And the clouds just cry on our shoulders
Liberating, throwing their liquid treasures.
How about summer's impatience to meet you?
Or a movie composing its actors and a review
About a sculpture perfecting its artist
And a canvas coloring its painter with mist
What if I sit back, and let the sheet continue it
While the reader struggles to write until infinite.
I have chosen that category almost aleatory[as in almost all my poems] because there is no "philosophy" category.
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moonahmed Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist
beautiful.

and yes there should be a category of "philosophy"
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013   General Artist
Thank you!
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1blackheart Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
OMG i just love this! this is so abstract!! it makes me feel so egoistic!! like really, we think the whole world revolves around us????
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   General Artist
I am glad you liked it :)
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Si-gyn Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is just.. brilliant! I love this poem! <3
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   General Artist
Thank you for sharing your opinion! :)
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mariswood Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Loved it, the point of view is so interesting and the words perfect. Congrats :clap:
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PseudonymLizzieDeLov Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Cloned comment... why bother to make such an OVER THE TOP statement on every poem you fav? You insult the writer with your inferior throwaway comments. For shame!
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KodokuNoNana Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   General Artist
Thank you!
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:iconpseudonymlizziedelov:
I wasn't getting at your work, and I never critised it.
I was simply asking how you got so much publicity, because I was genuinely curious. I even made a point to state I wasn't being sarcastic.
My dig was at the person (AceOfSongs)who felt the need to kiss your arse whilst making a jackass throw-away remark about every other artist on here.

On another note, I was writing casually, so yeah, I would use relaxed slang. There is a difference between writing casually and professionally, so right back at 'ya', sodding toff. And by the way, I thought 'English native language' was in EXTREMELY bad taste as I'm Irish. Prejudice cow. Do you wear sheets and carry burning crosses too? How can anyone support you after making such a horrible remark?

Since you 'sincerely respect' my relaxed writing skills when giving an opinion, let me give you another that has to do with your poem.
The grammer and punctuation... it needs serious work! Also, some lines could do with cutting out altogether. In this case, it should be professional.
I can't lie and say it's a bad poem. As much as it pains me now to say, because you're a prejudice bitch, I quite like it. It has bags of potential. But it needs a little editing.
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